The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram chart illustrates the proportion of adults involved in several
sports
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in 1997 and 2017.
Overall
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, the numbers increased in most of the
sports
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,
although
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only in cricket and swimming the participants' numbers were dissimilar. Based on the data, several kinds of
sports
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grew in both years. Football and rugby enthusiasts jumped from approximately 30,000 to almost 50,000 people.
Similarly
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, basketball and golf saw slight rises by more than 1,000 and 500 adults, respectively.
Lastly
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, basketball had a dramatic increase by above 10,000.
However
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, there were
also
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a few
sports
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that did not grow over the decades. Cricket,
for example
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, surged down from below 30,000 to under 10,000.
On the other hand
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, swimming stayed the same in both years, with more than 30,000 individuals. In comparison, only cricket had a declining proportion of enthusiastic adults, showing a significant drop over the years. Swimming remained constant in popularity throughout the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sports with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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