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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter • explain your situation • describe your problems • tell him/her when you think you can start.

#job #week #employer #situation
Dear Ali, As you know I
was suppose
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 to join as the new
Manager
 for Sales at Global Corp. next
week
.
However
, I have run into a bit of
problem
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 with my current employer regarding my
notice
period
 and won’t be able to start working next
week
. I am aware
this
 is going to cause some inconvenience, I hope you can consider my situation. As you know I have resigned from my current post here at Local
inc.
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 and am currently
seving
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serving
saving
 my
notice
period
. I had
requesstted
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requested
 an exemption of two weeks from my
notice
period
, which my line
manager
 had assured
would
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me would
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 be accepted by the Human
Resource
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Resources
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 (HR)
Manager
.
This
 is the reason I
had
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 committed to joining next
week
.
Due to
 some unknown reason the HR
manager
 has refused to accept my request and instructed my line
manager
 that I serve my full
notice
period
, which would be over after two weeks. Legally
this
 places me in a pickle, as I need to adhere to these instructions to fulfill my contractual obligations.
While
 I cannot officially join and
starte
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start
started
 coming to the office from next
week
, I can start working through a remote working arrangement. Most of my responsibilities here have already been delegated to my subordinate,
because
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 of
this
 I have plenty of free time at the office, which can be utilised to work on my new responsibilities with Global Corp. During
this
 delay I can work on the initial sales presentations and plans that are expected from me. I can
then
 join after two weeks from now and take charge of duties. I hope you understand my situation and consider the
purposed
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 solution. It would be a
lot
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 help and much appreciated. Best Regards, Humayun Waheed
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs are developed around a single idea to enhance clarity.
Task Achievement
Review and correct minor spelling and grammatical errors to present a more polished letter.
Task Achievement
The letter maintains a professional and polite tone throughout, which is suitable for the context of addressing a new employer.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, making it complete and formal.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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