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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only person traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers.

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Thanks to artificial intelligence some
cars
 have become automated. There is a belief that in the near
future
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 all the vehicles will be driverless.
This
 event absolutely will have drawbacks and merits but from my perspective, advantages might overtake the disadvantages. Technology is improving so fast almost in any field. One of the most significant changes is in transportation. They have manufactured several driverless
cars
 during the past 10 years like Tesla
cars
.It is estimated that in the following years, all kinds of vehicles will change in a way that
there
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won’t be needed for a driver. There are a number of advantages to
this
 change.The most significant one is related to costs.By using these
cars
 there is no need for paying for a driver so transporting costs will be reduced.In consequence, the level of death especially on roads which
connects
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 cities will dramatically reduce.Another worth noting benefit is safety and security.The artificial intelligence will be commanded to obey all traffic rules
therefore
 the rate of car crashes will descend.
On the other hand
,
This
 new transportation system might have some disadvantages. The most important minus point is limited options in driving
for instance
, There won’t be a person to drive faster or use shortcuts when it is necessary.
Additionally
, the maintenance of these systems
are
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 very complicated so they demand a specialist to solve any problem and keep them safe and clean. In conclusion, Future transportation
system
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systems
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 will be completely
depend
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 on technology and I believe the merits of
this
 change are highly likely to surface.
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task achievement
Expand on each point by providing more detailed explanations and examples. For instance, explain how driverless cars can reduce costs and improve safety.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you maintain consistent punctuation, particularly with regard to commas and periods. For example, add a space after periods and commas e.g., 'Tesla cars.It' should be 'Tesla cars. It'.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing both advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow your arguments easily.
task achievement
The argument that artificial intelligence can enhance safety by reducing car crashes is strong and persuasive.

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