People in the big cities are facing many health challenges due to high level of pollution. What causes air pollution in the big cities? Can you suggest some ways to solve this situation?
In
this
day and age, in order to own livable standards, more people always choose to become citizens of metropolises. Notwithstanding, they also
are the victims of poor air
quality to easily face numerous health problems due to
urbanization and overpopulation. My essay will analyze and give solutions to solve aforementioned issue.
With the development of the economy and society rapidly, more people request a higher living standard as well as
satisfaction with a job, thus
, they migrate to metropolitan areas. However
, the detrimental impact of overpopulation in modern cities is the main cause of air
pollution
in inhabitants’ lives. Because the number of residents increased dramatically as well as
private vehicles rising in numbers and the emission of Carbon dioxides from these transports can lead to a decrease in clean air
quality and health situation. Besides
that, because of their ego and individual upper class , city dwellers also
refuse to transfer by public transport, therefore
, the case of air
pollution
becomes uncontrol. Furthermore
, the local authorities of cities, and corporations boost the speed of urbanization in order to construct infrastructures and budlings for different demands and it also
means superficies of forests are declined by activities from humans. As a result
, the mentioned actions of inhabitants exert dire consequences which are the disappearance of flora to play the role of air
purifiers. People are poised to face dangerous diseases which have correlated with air
pollution
such
as breaking respiratory systems and especially, lung cancer devises over 1 million deaths in countries every year.
Therefore
, the governments of countries in the world give solutions to remedy air
pollution
by funding and organizing to build natural parks between the city to flora that can absorb CO2 and create clean oxygen to increase the quality of air
. Additionally
, residents take responsibility to raise awareness for guarding the environment such
as using public vehicles to solve air
pollution
effectively.
In conclusion, inhabitants and governments support together for upgrading the standard of the atmosphere as well as
a healthy life which also
is protected by the awareness of each person.Submitted by phamnhung275 on
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