People in the big cities are facing many health challenges due to high level of pollution. What causes air pollution in the big cities? Can you suggest some ways to solve this situation?

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day and age, in order to own livable standards, more people always choose to become citizens of metropolises. Notwithstanding, they

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are the victims of poor

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quality to easily face numerous health problems

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urbanization and overpopulation. My essay will analyze and give solutions to solve aforementioned issue. With the development of the economy and society rapidly, more people request a higher living standard

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satisfaction with a job,

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, they migrate to metropolitan areas.

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, the detrimental impact of overpopulation in modern cities is the main cause of

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pollution

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in inhabitants’ lives. Because the number of residents increased dramatically

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private vehicles rising in numbers and the emission of Carbon dioxides from these transports can lead to a decrease in clean

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quality and health situation.

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that, because of their ego and individual upper class , city dwellers

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refuse to transfer by public transport,

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, the case of

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pollution

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becomes uncontrol.

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, the local authorities of cities, and corporations boost the speed of urbanization in order to construct infrastructures and budlings for different demands and it

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means superficies of forests are declined by activities from humans.

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, the mentioned actions of inhabitants exert dire consequences which are the disappearance of flora to play the role of

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purifiers. People are poised to face dangerous diseases which have correlated with

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pollution

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as breaking respiratory systems and especially, lung cancer devises over 1 million deaths in countries every year.

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, the governments of countries in the world give solutions to remedy

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pollution

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by funding and organizing to build natural parks between the city to flora that can absorb CO2 and create clean oxygen to increase the quality of

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, residents take responsibility to raise awareness for guarding the environment

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as using public vehicles to solve

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pollution

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effectively. In conclusion, inhabitants and governments support together for upgrading the standard of the atmosphere

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a healthy life which

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is protected by the awareness of each person.

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Try to improve sentence structure and clarity. Some sentences are long and complex, which can hinder understanding.

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The essay would benefit from including more specific examples and real-life situations to support the points discussed.

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Provide clearer connections between paragraphs to improve the logical flow of ideas.

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Consider expanding on solutions with more detailed analysis and explanation on how they can specifically address the problem.

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The essay covers both parts of the prompt, identifying causes of air pollution and suggesting solutions.

introduction conclusion present

The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the issue and solutions.

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There is a good range of vocabulary used, demonstrating some sophistication in language use.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

347 words

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