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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
#floor #plan #library #years
A glance at the two maps provided reveals the
floor
 map of a public library two
decade
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 ago and how it seems now.
Overall
, one particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that the first provides information on
old
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the old
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floor
 including three rooms,
while
 the second indicates a huge change in
new
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floor
 with four rooms.
According to
 what is shown, it is
notworthy
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noteworthy
not worthy
 to note that the
room
of
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 children’s books has
converted
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been converted
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 to
lecture
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a lecture
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room
 without any changes.
Furthermore
. the reading
room
 has
replaced
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been replaced
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to
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with
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the cumputer
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cumputer
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computer
room
with
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 changing its entrance.
Additionally
, the games’
room
 has
substituted
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been substituted
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 with
books’
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the books’
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room
in addition
 its rooms
has
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have
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 increased and
likewise
 be adding two
sofa
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sofas
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.
In contrast
, the tables,
chaires
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chairs
, all reference books and
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk have
removed
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been removed
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.
Moreover
,
information
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an information
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 desk and self-service machines have
added
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been added
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 on the right hand of the
floor
. It is interesting to note that
adults
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 fiction books
has
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have
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 only placed on
right
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the right
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 hand of the
floor
 close to
lecture
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the lecture
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room
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words floor, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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