The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the the expenditure of the United Kingdom and
France
. which includes the the
Remove the redundancy
apply
presice
amount Correct your spelling
price
in
each of the 5 consumer goods , Change preposition
for
such
as Cars, Computers ,Books ,Perfume , And Camera , which are measured in pound
sterling .
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pounds
Overall
, for both countries the highest expedentures
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expenditure
are
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is
in
Cars , Change preposition
on
while
in the for U.K
. the lowest payments is in
Cameras , as Change preposition
on
oppossed
to Correct your spelling
opposed
French
Correct article usage
the French
that
is Correct pronoun usage
which
in
perfumes .
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on
Firstly
, the expedentures
of cars is the highest in both Correct your spelling
expenditures
U.
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the U.K.
K
. and France
, however
the United Kingdom Add a comma
however,
expedentures
is exactly 450 Correct your spelling
expenditures
thousand
, while
France
is at level 400 thousand
which is lower in compartion
with Correct your spelling
comparison
U.
Correct article usage
the U.K.
K
. , on the other hand
, the lowest expedentures
in the U.Correct your spelling
expenditures
K
. is for perfumes its
around 150 Replace the word
it's
it is
thousand
, while
france
is exactly 150 Change the capitalization
France
thousand
pounds sterling in terms of cameras
For the
Computers and books , both Correct article usage
apply
france
and uk are around the same level in terms of Change the capitalization
France
computres
, Correct your spelling
computers
median
of 370 Add an article
a median
the median
thousand
, while
the books payments for the uk
and Correct your spelling
UK
france
are exactly 400 Change the capitalization
France
thounsans
and 300 Correct your spelling
thousand
thousands
thousand
respectively .Submitted by nouf.alkhalaifi2 on
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