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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows the the expenditure of the United Kingdom and
France
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 . which includes the
the
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apply
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presice
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price
 amount
in
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for
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 each of the 5 consumer goods ,
such
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 as Cars, Computers ,Books ,Perfume , And Camera , which are measured in
pound
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pounds
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 sterling .
Overall
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 , for both countries the highest
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expedentures
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expenditure
are
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is
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in
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on
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 Cars ,
while
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 in the for U.
K
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. the lowest payments is
in
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on
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 Cameras , as
oppossed
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opposed
 to
French
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the French
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that
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which
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 is
in
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on
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 perfumes .
Firstly
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 , the
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expedentures
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expenditures
 of cars is the highest in both
U.
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the U.K.
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K
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. and
France
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 ,
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however
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however,
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 the United Kingdom
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expedentures
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expenditures
 is exactly 450
thousand
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 ,
while
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France
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 is at level 400
thousand
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 which is lower in
compartion
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comparison
 with
U.
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the U.K.
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K
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. ,
on the other hand
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, the lowest
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expedentures
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expenditures
 in the U.
K
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. is for perfumes
its
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it's
it is
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 around 150
thousand
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 ,
while
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france
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France
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 is exactly 150
thousand
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 pounds sterling in terms of cameras For
the
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apply
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Computers and books , both
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france
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France
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 and uk are around the same level in terms of
computres
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computers
,
median
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a median
the median
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 of 370
thousand
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 ,
while
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 the books payments for the
uk
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UK
 and
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france
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France
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 are exactly 400
thounsans
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thousand
thousands
 and 300
thousand
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 respectively .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, expedentures, k, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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