The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main  features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the the expenditure of the United Kingdom and
France
. which includes the
the
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apply
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presice
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price
amount
in
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for
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each of the 5 consumer goods ,
such
as Cars, Computers ,Books ,Perfume , And Camera , which are measured in
pound
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pounds
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sterling .
Overall
, for both countries the highest
expedentures
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expenditure
are
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is
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in
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on
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Cars ,
while
in the for U.
K
. the lowest payments is
in
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on
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Cameras , as
oppossed
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opposed
to
French
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the French
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that
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which
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is
in
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on
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perfumes .
Firstly
, the
expedentures
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expenditures
of cars is the highest in both
U.
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the U.K.
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K
. and
France
,
however
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however,
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the United Kingdom
expedentures
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expenditures
is exactly 450
thousand
,
while
France
is at level 400
thousand
which is lower in
compartion
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comparison
with
U.
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the U.K.
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K
. ,
on the other hand
, the lowest
expedentures
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expenditures
in the U.
K
. is for perfumes
its
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it's
it is
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around 150
thousand
,
while
france
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France
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is exactly 150
thousand
pounds sterling in terms of cameras For
the
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Computers and books , both
france
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France
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and uk are around the same level in terms of
computres
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computers
,
median
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a median
the median
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of 370
thousand
,
while
the books payments for the
uk
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UK
and
france
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France
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are exactly 400
thounsans
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thousand
thousands
and 300
thousand
respectively .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, expedentures, k, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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