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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the
sum
 of
visitors
 that
visiting
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visited
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 a Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017. Units are measured by millions of tourists.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the
number
 of tourists both staying on
cruise
 ships and on
island
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the island
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were
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apply
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increased throughout the given period. In terms of the
number
 of the folk that
rooming
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room
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 on
cruise
 boats stood at around 0,25 in 2010.
Although
on
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in
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coming
Correct article usage
the coming
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 year it had a slight increase, in 2012 the
number
 was back again like at the beginning. In 2013, the
sum
 of
visitors
 that
staying
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stayed
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 on
cruise
 ships increased slightly at exactly 0,5, before reaching a peak at 2 in 2017.
Regarding the
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The
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 total
number
 of tourists that staying on
island
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the island
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 stood at just over 0,5 in the first year. Even though the
sum
 of
visitors
 who
rooming
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roomed
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 on
island
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the island
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stuck
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was stuck
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 in 2011, it witnessed a moderate climb to around 1,25 in 2012.
Furthermore
, the
sum
 of people who
staying
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stayed
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 on
island
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the island
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 peaked at 1,5 in the following three years.
Although
 it had a slight drop in 2016, the
number
back
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was back
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 at
peak
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a peak
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 in 2017. So, the total
number
 of
visitors
 both staying on
cruise
 ships and
island
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islands
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 peaked at 3,5 in the
last
 period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sum, visitors, island, number, cruise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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