Topic: In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

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believe that alive in the
city
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more
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comfortable than in
village
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. The main
reasons
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why they are moving from rural to urban is
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job
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jobs

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.
This
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essay will discuss
about
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some
causes
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this
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problem. Actually, everyone
need
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to search income for
fulfill
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their basic life necessary. Sometimes, when the
people
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lived
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live

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in the village, they
are meeting
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some problems
especially
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, especially

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about
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with

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the job
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job
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jobs

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.
Job
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opportunity
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opportunities

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in
the
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urban biggest than in rural
areas
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and
that is
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the first cause. The second
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causes
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are
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salary, it is becoming the first
poin
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why many
people
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choose
live
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in the
city
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.
Also
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, the salary
already
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related
on
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the time
work
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both
of
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full-time
or
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part-time. The third
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causes
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are
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career,
usually
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every
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people
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person

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moving
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from rural towards urban
areas
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because they have
placemented
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a career
job
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in
the
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company.
In
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other
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hand, they have
marriaged
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married
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and lived in the
city
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with their new family. Not just for
employee
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employees

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but can be seen for
student
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. There are some
causes
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the
students
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choose
moving
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to the
city
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. In my country, almost all
students
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especially after
graduated
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from senior high school. They are next studying
in
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some university in the
city
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.
Absolutelly
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, the best quality of education available in rural
areas
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both of facility the school, public transportation, the advancement of technology, the community and others.
In addition
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, the
students
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can improve their skills through some
opportunity
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opportunities

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that they get. The social
environtment
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environment

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also
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became
the
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important
aspects
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.
For instance
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, the additional classes like music, dance, art and others. The government
also
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organize some events for the
students
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. My conclusion,
this
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essay
have
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discussed some
causes
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the
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many
peoples
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people

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moving from rural to urban
areas
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both
of
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job
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jobs

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or
employee
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employees

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and
students
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that continue their education stage.

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logical structure
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Work on grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity and readability. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles.
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The essay touches on both the reasons why people move from rural to urban areas and the consequences for students, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • migration
  • metropolis
  • infrastructure
  • amenities
  • rural exodus
  • standard of living
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
  • job prospects
  • overpopulation
  • housing crisis
  • public transport
  • sanitation issues
  • agricultural decline
  • workforce
  • traditional values
  • cultural diversity
  • environmental impact
  • pollution
  • green spaces
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