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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart depicts the various transportation ways in order to commute by workforces in a European municipality over the 40-year period.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
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most individuals tend to use their automobiles
at the end
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 of
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,
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 the least commuters were fond of using their bicycles in 2000.
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, the rate of public transportation users
were fluctuated
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 over these years.
According to
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 the data, in 1960, the most people were hiking to their companies with just under %40, followed by their bicyclist counterparts, the bus travellers and the car owners with %25, almost %18 and only %5 respectively.
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, in 1980, there was a significant reduction in those who were walking to their destinations by %20.
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,
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 trend followed by their bicyclist colleagues and they are reached %20. But, the car ownership rates rose dramatically to just over %20 and th
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ic transportation users number increased to almost %25. In 2000, the highest proport
ion
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the vehicle own
er
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s by %40 and the lowest r
ate
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were bike travell
ers
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with %5.
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, the third place were bus users, followed by hiking commuters with %15 and roughly %8 respectively.
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