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Band 3

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now.

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The diagram depicts the difference between the students' accommodation buildings in 2010 and now.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the new buildings cater to
large
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a large
the large
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 number of
stundents
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students
. In 2010, the students' accommodation
appartment
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apartment
offers
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offered
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 three
bedrooms
, a gigantic living
room
, a shared bathroom, and a
kitchen
. On the outdoor, there was a huge garden surrounding the building. Currently, the
appartment
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apartment
 serves
large
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a large
the large
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 number of students, where now there are five
bedrooms
, a shared bathroom, and a
kitchen
.
However
, in the past, there was a
separated
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separate
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 gigantic living
room
, but now it
combined
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is combined
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 with the
kitchen
.
Moreover
, an en-suite
room
 is built. On the
outdoor
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outdoors
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, a car parking area is added, and
garden
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a garden
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 behind the
buliding
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building
. In summary,
while
 in the past there
was
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were
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 only three
bedrooms
 per
appartment
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apartment
, now they cater for five
studnets
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students
, offering them more
bedrooms
,
car
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a car
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 parking area, an en-suite
room
,
a
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and a
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separated
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separate
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 area for
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 and living
room
.
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task achievement
Ensure that all details from the diagrams are accurately described and compared. For example, mention the number of rooms more precisely and comment on other specific changes.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow between sentences and sections. Using transition words and cohesive devices can help make your writing smoother and clearer.
task achievement
The essay clearly identifies the main changes between the 2010 student accommodation and the present buildings.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a structured format with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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