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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The chart illustrates the
frequency
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 of eating at fast
food
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restaurants
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 among
people
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 in the USA over a decade from 2003 to 2013. In 2003, a notable
percentage
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 of
people
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 visited fast
food
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restaurants
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 once a
week
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, making
this
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 the most common
frequency
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. Approximately 31% of
people
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 fell into
this
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 category. A significant portion, around 20%,
also
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 ate at fast
food
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restaurants
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 several
times
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 a
week
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. Visits once or twice a month were
also
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 popular, with about 30% of
people
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 choosing
this
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frequency
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. Eating at fast
food
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restaurants
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 every day was the least common, with less than 5% of
people
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 doing so. About 13% of
people
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 visited a few
times
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 a year, and around 4% never ate at these
restaurants
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. By 2013, the
frequency
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 of eating at fast
food
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restaurants
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 had shifted. The most common
frequency
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 was once or twice a month, chosen by about 33% of
people
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. There was a decline in the
percentage
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 of
people
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 eating at fast
food
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restaurants
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 once a
week
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, dropping to around 27%. The
percentage
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 of
people
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 eating several
times
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 a
week
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 remained relatively stable at approximately 16%. Daily visits remained low, slightly above 3%. Those who ate a few
times
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 a year increased to about 15%,
while
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 the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who never ate at fast
food
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restaurants
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 remained low at around 4%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words frequency, food, restaurants, people, percentage, week, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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