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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the sources of
production
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 of electricity in two countries
while
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 showing the proportions related to renewable sources
seperately
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separately
.
Overall
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, there was a
drastical
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drastic
 difference between the way of electricity
generating
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generation
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 and the way of renewable
energy
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production
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 in
Germany
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 and
France
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 in 2009. In detail,
Germany
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 was more
concern
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 about conventional thermal
production
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 at 59.6%,
whereas
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 nuclear source was the major at 76% in
France
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.
Lowest
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 proportion of contribution was from
regular
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the regular
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heat forming
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 method in
France
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 at 10.3%. slightly less than
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a quater
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quater
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quarter
 of
energy
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production
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 was through nuclear resources in
Germany
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this
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 year. To elaborate more,
majority
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the majority
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 of renewable
ener
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energy
 was taken from hydroelectric power at 80.5% in
France
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although
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 it was used less than
fifth
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a fifth
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 from renewable
energy
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. Biomass and wind contributed
in
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more or less the same
amout
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amount
 in
Germany
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 which counted more than
two third
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two-thirds
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from
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of
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 whole renewable resources.Solar was the least used reproductable
energy
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 source in both countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, energy, germany, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • generation
  • renewable sources
  • non-renewable sources
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • output levels
  • break down
  • hydroelectric
  • biomass
  • reliance
  • significant differences
  • unexpected findings
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