The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the sources of
production
of electricity in two countries
while
showing the proportions related to renewable sources
seperately
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separately
.
Overall
, there was a
drastical
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drastic
difference between the way of electricity
generating
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and the way of renewable
energy
production
in
Germany
and
France
in 2009. In detail,
Germany
was more
concern
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about conventional thermal
production
at 59.6%,
whereas
nuclear source was the major at 76% in
France
.
Lowest
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proportion of contribution was from
regular
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the regular
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heat forming
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method in
France
at 10.3%. slightly less than
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a quater
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quater
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quarter
of
energy
production
was through nuclear resources in
Germany
this
year. To elaborate more,
majority
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of renewable
ener
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energy
was taken from hydroelectric power at 80.5% in
France
although
it was used less than
fifth
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a fifth
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from renewable
energy
. Biomass and wind contributed
in
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more or less the same
amout
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amount
in
Germany
which counted more than
two third
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two-thirds
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from
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of
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whole renewable resources.Solar was the least used reproductable
energy
source in both countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, energy, germany, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • generation
  • renewable sources
  • non-renewable sources
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • output levels
  • break down
  • hydroelectric
  • biomass
  • reliance
  • significant differences
  • unexpected findings
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