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Many customs and traditional ways of behaviors are no longer relevant to the modern life and no worth keeping. Do you agree or disagree?

#customs #behaviors #life
Nowadays, most of the
customs
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behaviors
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 which
associated
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 with the past can not be
usefull
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useful
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modern life and keeping them can be worthless. In my opinion, I strongly agree that eliminating
much
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 traditional
behaviors
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 is a good idea
due to
time
-saving and increasing the rate of
quality
 in doing different activities.
firstly
, leaving many
customs
 and traditional ways of behaviours from the past can be a key step to
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 a lot of
time
. because in the past, Many people had to travel long distances on foot or by horse to reach another city.
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that
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 is why, they are really
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 for them in order to arrive
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 location. so, on some occasions,they can not arrive on
time
.
therefore
 they lose that opportunity to do their tasks. so,
this
 strategy was really boring for the individuals. but these days many people can benefit from different kinds of
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 in order to travel
other
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 cities in the best possible form without any tiring and spending lots of
time
.
that is
 why,they can do their task on
time
.
secondly
, doing a great number of
customs
 and traditional ways of
behaviors
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 related to the past can not be a good idea. because it causes
reduced
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the
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rate of
quality
 in doing activities. in the past, many individuals wash their clothes by hand.
this
 way, they do not have enough power to clean them.
That is
 why, they have to use a large amount of water to clean the
cloth
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 very well
.
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that is
 why,
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 amount of water for cleaning is not logical. but nowadays, thanks to technology, many people can use different smart tools, like washing machines to clean their clothes with a little water and the best
quality
. in conclusion, breaking old
customs
 and traditional ways of
behavior
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 can not be a good idea because it can provide many problems,
such
 as spending a lot of
time
 and decreasing the rate of
quality
 in their tasks.
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