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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meaks of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meaks of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts clearly demonstrate the proportion of
sodium
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, saturated
fats
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, and added sugars in the four daily meals of Americans.
Overall
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, it is evident that dinner has the highest saturated fat and
sodium
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 content,
whereas
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snacks
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 contain sugar more than any other meal.
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, breakfast consistently shows the lowest percentage for all three nutrients. In terms of
sodium
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 and saturated
fats
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, breakfast and
snacks
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 have the least impact with the former accounting for less than a fifth of
sodium
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 and
fats
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 and the latter contributing 14% of
sodium
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 and a notable 21% of
fats
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.
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, when it comes to added sugars,
snacks
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 are the main source, comprising 42% of the total intake. Meanwhile, breakfast contributes the smallest share at 16% , making it the least detrimental meal.
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, lunch and dinner are significant sources of
sodium
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 and saturated fat intake. Dinner leads with more than a third of
sodium
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 and saturated
fats
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, making it the highest contributor. Lunch follows, providing less than a third of these two nutrients. Regarding added sugar, these two meals make up 23% and 19% of the intake respectively, indicating that they are
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 substantial sources of sweets, though to a lesser extent than
snacks
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, fats, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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