The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
The chart shows the spending
according to
eight different categories as
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a percent
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percent
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per cent
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of weekly
income
in one country in 1968 and 2018.
First,
in 1968
average
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the average
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family spent on food 35% of
total
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their total
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weekly
income
,
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while
rest
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categories
viried
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varied
from 5% to 10%.
However
, in 2018 the expenses of leisure were
main
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part of the budget,
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for approximately 22%, followed by housing with around 18%, and moving food to
the
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third place,
slighly
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slightly
above the
expeditures
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expenditure
expenditures
on transport.
In addition
, spending on personal
good
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goods
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, fuel and power, and closing and
footware
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footwear
halved,
accounted
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for less than 5% of weekly
income
.
Finally
, household goods were roughly 7% in both 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, during
fifty-year
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the fifty-year
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period of
time
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the average weekly spending as part of weekly
income
changed a lot.
Budget
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on food halved,
spendings
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spending
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on housing, transport,
leisure
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and leisure
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increased, and on personal
good
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goods
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, fuel and power, and closing and
footware
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footwear
decreased, and only household
good
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goods
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remained at the same level.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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