The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.

The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.
The line chart demonstrates and gives
the
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helicopter view of the sales of three best-seller items in a bakery in 2014. As can be seen clearly from the chart, in the first and
last
two months, bread stayed at the highest rank
while
pies seemed to be at the lowest position.
Moreover
, bread and pies fluctuated and had an upward trend
while
buns witnessed a downward trend. In January, the sales of bread started at 80,000$
then
ranging dramatically from 40,000$ to 65,000$ before it increased and stopped at 80,000$ in December.
Furthermore
, in the first month of the year, buns rose noticeably from 40,000$ to 70,000$ and stayed at 70,000$ for four months from May to August, after which it witnessed a marked downward trend to 30,000$ in December.
Lastly
, pies had
lowest
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sales with only 10,000$ in January
then
climbed slightly to 20,000$ in October before increasing rapidly to 40,000$ in the
last
month of the year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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