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The table gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
data
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 represents the
amount
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 spent by consumers in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in three categories in the year 2002. As is presented in the table
data
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,
People
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 of those countries spent more on
foods
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food
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 and
tobaccos
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tobacco
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 than they did
for
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on
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 dresses,
education
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 and
entertainments
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entertainment
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.
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data
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, Turk
people
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 spent the highest percentage
of
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on
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 foods and
tobaccos
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tobacco
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 amounting
one-third
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 of their total expenses on consumer products. Irish
people
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 spent more than 28% on
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 category
while
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people
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of
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 Italy, Spain and Sweden spent just over 15%
for
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on
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foods
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food
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 and
tobaccos
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tobacco
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. For clothing and footwear, the
people
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 of these five countries spent around 5% to 9% of which
Italian
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Italians
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 spent the highest percentage (9%). Interestingly the expenditure
in
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 leisure activities and
education
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 was much less than the
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 spent on food, tobacco and dresses. The highest
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 spent on
education
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 and entertainment was done by Turkish
people
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 (4.35%) and the least
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 spent
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was in Spain (1.98%). No nation among the given five spent more than 5%
in
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education
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 and leisure activities
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 the given
data
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, amount, people, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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