In many countries, the consumption of fast food is becoming more and more popular. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend for individuals and for society as a whole.
There are increasing
consumption
of fast food
amongst society in many countries and this
phenomenon is giving benefits and drawbacks both for people and society. In this
essay, we will discuss both perspectives.
One of the advantages of the increasing consumption
of fast food
is the rise of the economy especially for the small and medium enterprises. This
is because of their behaviour to repeat their order resulting in more profits. In Indonesia, for example
, a local franchise named Kebab Turki Baba is getting popular and it helps the SMEs to expand their business and also
helps the government increase their Gross Domestic Profits by about 50%. Therefore
, the rising number of fast food
orders is affecting the economy.
On the other hand
, the disadvantage of fast food
is there are health
issues from excessive consumption
. One of the health
issues is obesity, it is because of certain ingredients contained in the food
. Additionally
, fast foods lack nutrition and affect the development of children's health
during their golden era, thus
, consuming large numbers of fast food
is dangerous. Some research, for instance
, proves that a plate of hamburger
contains 10% more calories than the ideal numbers and Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
this
can cause health
issues such
as obesity and it could burden children's health
development. Moreover
, this
could be a topic to debate because of the effects of fast food
on health
, hence
, I believe that health
should be a priority rather than an economic aspect.
To conclude
, the consumption
of fast food
that become popular affects the economy because it helps small and medium enterprises, however
, it affects consumers' health
because of unhealthy ingredients that are contained in fast food
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