the parents of your australian friend chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for her write a letter to chris 's parents. In your letter say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party esplain why you won't be able to attend the party give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

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Dear Mrs/Mr Kave, I am writing in connection with the invitation
for
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the surprise birthday
party
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of Chris on Monday. I never forget the
time
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we had together at Sepid School. He is swamped with
works
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and she has a
tight-schedule
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so I believe she would enjoy
this
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party
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because she never
think
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about
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. It
woud
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would
be a blast! Unfortunately, I will not be able to attend the
party
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because I cannot manage my
time
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for
this
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. To explain more, after graduating
university
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from university
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, I
have
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started to work as a manager at the Blue Company. I should check taxes and workforce timetables.
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, I ought to control their performance and their office circumstance. Because of these activities, I do not have enough
time
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to attend the
party
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on Monday. I hope to make a plan to see her as soon as possible. I hope to see her another
time
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at the coffee.
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the fact that I know she is
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fond of fancy coffees, I would try inviting her to Sara Coffee in the vicinity of our office. I believe we would have
a
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quality
time
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with each other. I look forward to
recieving
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receiving
a
kindly
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responce
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response
from you. Best wishes,
Mashid
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Mashed
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task achievement
In your letter, try to be a bit more specific about why Chris would enjoy the party. Mentioning any specific surprises or activities they enjoy could strengthen your response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency in the use of pronouns. For example, you mentioned Chris as 'he' once and as 'she' later. Maintaining gender consistency is crucial for clarity.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear structure in your letter which makes it easy to follow. Each paragraph addresses a different aspect of the task effectively.
task achievement
The tone of your writing is appropriate for a letter of this nature. It is polite and friendly, which suits the context well.
task achievement
You have successfully covered all parts of the task, explaining why Chris would enjoy the party, why you cannot attend, and proposing a future plan to meet.
coherence cohesion
The closing of the letter is appropriate and polite, leaving a good impression.
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