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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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For some individuals, becoming self-employed is a preferable choice as their main source of income,
instead
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 of working as a
staff
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 in an already established business.
This
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 phenomenon occurs
due to
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 the work contract
that is
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 too strict.
However
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, there are some drawbacks that come with
this
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 decision,
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 as uncertain payment and the absence of extra perks. Working contracts that are given by the employer can be a burden to the employee, especially in
this
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 economy where it is hard to get a good amount of pay just from
one
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 job.
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 is because the contract forbids the
staff
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 in
one
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 company to have another job.
For example
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, in a tech company, even though the salary is not a lot, especially for junior
staff
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, it is not allowed for them to have side jobs in order to minimize data leakage that may harm the client.
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, many working classes decided to become
a freelancers
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a freelancer
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 to pursue more opportunities in order to have more than
one
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 salary.
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, no fixed amount of money that they can get per month
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 not having additional incentives
besides
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 their main wage could be the drawbacks that may happen as a freelancer.
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, as a web developers freelancer, they can only get paid for
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 project, which means if there is no client that hires them
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 there is a chance they will not get any payment for a
while
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.
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, it is quite rare for the client to give them anything
besides
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 payment with money.
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 a company
staff
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 can get their health insurance covered by the organisation.
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, people choose to be independent workers to distance themselves from work contracts that could limit them from earning additional wages. But in working outside of the organisation, salary may become uncertain, and rarely will they get additional incentives.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that all points are clearly linked with transition words and phrases to enhance logical flow.
task achievement
Expand on the advantages of self-employment to provide a more balanced view.
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Provide more varied examples to support different points you make.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the argument well.
coherence cohesion
The main points are generally well-supported, with examples provided.
task achievement
The essay successfully addresses the prompt, discussing both reasons for self-employment and potential disadvantages.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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