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Many historic buildings are being destroyed or damaged. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to preserve these buildings?

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Historical preservation is surely one way to conserve the culture.
However
, many ancient
structures
 have been mismanaged and pulled down in recent times. In
this
 essay, I will explain why
such
occurence
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occurrence
occurrences
 is happening and the way forward. There are various reasons why old and monumental houses are pulled down. First among them is a lack of understanding of the uniqueness and historical value of
such
structures
. A lot of people in leadership positions particularly in government do not have sufficient information about their ancient communities and their significance to development thereby grounding facilities that have historical significance which would not have happened if they were acquainted with the story that birthed the structure. The second reason is the weak and poorly maintained building. Some of these buildings have become fragile and pose various degrees of disaster to lives and properties that surround them and in order to avert these dangers, taking off the structure from its foundation may be the solution to forestall
further
 dilapidation even though there is a better
ways
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 to keep the building for more years. Having discussed the many why buildings are being pulled down, there are so many ways to protect them, the primary of them is adequate maintenance of
such
 ancient buildings. Many of these houses can be turned into tourist attraction centres where visitors can come to learn about the history of the community and its numerous cultural activities, tourists can be allowed to access
such
structures
 with a token amount of money which will in turn be used to maintain
such
 facility and
also
 payment of salary to those who are workers in the building. In conclusion, dilapidation and insufficient historical knowledge are the main reasons why historic
structures
are
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 been grounded,
however
, converting them into amusement centres for tourists will be a good way to protect them.
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example advice
Use specific examples to illustrate points. For instance, mentioning a well-known historic building that was demolished or successfully preserved can enhance the essay.
structure advice
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas presented flow logically. This will improve the overall coherence and make it easier for the reader to follow your arguments.
content advice
While your ideas are clear and comprehensive, consider elaborating on the reasons for the destruction of historic buildings with more detailed explanations or data. This will solidify your arguments.
structure highlight
The essay has a clear introduction and a strong conclusion that summarize the main points effectively.
content highlight
The main reasons for the destruction of historic buildings and the suggested solutions are clearly presented.

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