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Some people today have argued that countries should interfere less in the affairs of other nations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some that
countries
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 should less interfere in the internal stuff of other states. I totally agree with
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 statement because other
countries
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 cannot understand the structure of a particular
nation
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 and may influence negatively on the development of the
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 with, one of the reasons why
countries
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 should not influence others may be the possible catastrophes that might occur in the economy.
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 to say, every
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 is differentiated by cultural heritage and policies. The improvements given by another country might not result positively in another state because it would not be a positive reform for inhabitants. To illustrate, the people of Afghanistan have suffered a lot
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 the inappropriate reforms, which were related to the economy that members of power did not accept .
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, there have been misunderstandings between politicians, and collisions occurred between the militaries of the two nations.
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, civilians were victims of political movements.
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, the influence of
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 might destroy the country fully. All
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 are not the same economically. If certain international reforms might have a positive impact on a particular
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, they would not have the same impact on another state.
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, developed
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 should be less involved in developing
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. In conclusion,
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 have to be less involved in foreign movements
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 the different concepts. If it is necessary,
countries
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 should consider the wealth of other nations and the wealth of their inhabitants. People might become victims of misunderstandings between politicians and there would be a disappearance of less-developed
countries
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