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task 1: the maps below show the changes to an art gallery floor plan in 2005 and the present day.

task 1: the maps below show the changes to an art gallery floor plan in 2005 and the present day.
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The diagrams illustrate how an art
gallery
Use synonyms
 floor’s layout has changed since 2005.
Overall
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, the art
gallery
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 has had its floor reconstructed over the given period, with more space and the addition of new amenities for both the outside and the inside. Looking first at the top left corner of the 2005 map, there used to be a cafe shop before it was replaced by a
gallery
Use synonyms
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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, which occupies less area than that of the former.
Basing
Wrong verb form
Based
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 on one side
the
Change preposition
of the
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gallery
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, the vending machine is the supplier
for
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of
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 beverages
instead
Linking Words
 of the coffee shop.
Additionally
Linking Words
, there is a lift next to the right side of the staircase in
present
Correct article usage
the present
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days
Fix the agreement mistake
day
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. Turning to the bottom left corner, where
a
Correct article usage
apply
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exhibition room number 4 was located has been constructed
to
Change preposition
into
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 2 sectors:
temporary
Correct article usage
a temporary
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 exhibition and
area
Correct article usage
an area
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 catering to children. Meanwhile, the position
for
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of
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 receptionist was transferred from the corner right between the staircase and
gallery
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 office in 2005, which was
then
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remove
Change the form of the verb
removed
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 to make more room, to the
center
Change the spelling
centre
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 of the
gallery
Use synonyms
 floor.
In contrast
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, a row of exhibition rooms on the right side remains unchanged with the entrance,
while
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 the external area
was
Unnecessary verb
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added ramps for
wheel chair
Correct your spelling
wheelchair
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.
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