The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the
quantity
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number
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of young commuters using five different means of transport in one country between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of
children
who were likely to commute declined gradually. In 1990, most
children
travelled to school by means of walking with an average of 12.5
millions
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.
Additionally
, car passenger was the least mode of transportation being utilized.
Furthermore
, cycling and a combination of walking and bus have almost the same quantity of commuters resorting to it. Turning to the year 2010, young commuters who used car passenger as
mode
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a mode
the mode
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of transportation dramatically increased more than twice of its quantity in 1990,
whereas
children
who preferred to travel to school by walking significantly decreased in halves over the period.
Moreover
,
children
who tend to use a combination of bus and walking and taking the bus alone appeared to be reduced slightly,
while
those who resorted to cycling shrunk
substancially
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substantially
to just 2 million over the given period of time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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