The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, between 2000 and 2009. 

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart illustrates how many houses that built in Derby and Nottingham from 2000 to 2009. The units are measured per
year
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Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the living places built in both cities had a
fluctuate
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movement
through
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over
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a period of time,
while
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at the end
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year
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, the house project witnessed a dramatic increase. In terms of the number of
the
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houses built in Derby, it stood at just below 50 in 2000 and remained steady in the following
year
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.
Thereafter
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, it increased slightly to exactly 120 in 2003
then
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remained stable over a period of 5 years. From
this
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point onward, it rose dramatically and reached a peak at around 350. Regarding the houses built in Nottingham, it started at precisely 50 in 2000.
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it saw a regular increase just above 50 in 2001,
then
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it fell moderately to around 20 in 2001. From
this
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point onward, it peaked at exactly 250 in 2009, despite it had a plummet one
year
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before.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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