60.The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

60.The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given chart is a figure revealing data about the number of cinema visitors in Auckland, from 1995 to 2003, which is compared in 2 groups of age.
Overall
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, the percentage of attendance increased during
this
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period
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,
while
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cinema visitors at certain ages decreased.
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, the people who are in age groups experienced a downward trend. As the tables show, in 1996, the proportion of all people who preferred to go to the cinemas was 62%, and it increased in 1997, to 72%. After that, it remained unchanged at 72% until 1998.
Then
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it experienced a fluctuation, and saw 72% again, by 2000.
While
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the amount of
Frequency
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Frequent
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visitors diminished during
this
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period
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to 8.3, by 2000. In order to visitor, who had a certain age, by 1996, all ages were in the lowest stage, between 10-15. In 1997 and 1999, they reached a peak, at 21 and 24, respectively.
Whereas
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at the end
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of the
period
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, they had a decrease and saw the same number, which they had at the start of the
period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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