The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
•The chart provided illustrates the count of
trips
taken by children in a certain country to commute to and from school
using various forms of transportation in the years 1990 and 2010.
•In 1990, walking to school
was predominant, with approximately 12 million
trips
per year
. In contrast
, only 4 million
trips
were made by car. The remaining modes of transport, such
as cycling, walking and bus
, and just bus
, each showed a similar figure of about 6 million
trips
per year
.
However
, 2010 presented a significant shift. The number
of students
commuting to school
by car rose to the highest, at 11 million
per year
. Conversely
, the number
of students
walking to school
decreased to 6 million
per year
. Additionally
, the number
of students
cycling to school
recorded the lowest figure, at 2 million
. Meanwhile, the number
of students
using walking and bus
and just bus
decreased to 3 million
and 5 million
respectively, compared to 1990.
Over time, with the development of transportation, it seems more common for children to travel by car rather than walkingSubmitted by jin960524 on
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, school, million, year, bus, number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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