The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
•The chart provided illustrates the count of
trips
taken by children in a certain country to commute to and from
school
using various forms of transportation in the years 1990 and 2010. •In 1990, walking to
school
was predominant, with approximately 12
million
trips
per
year
.
In contrast
, only 4
million
trips
were made by car. The remaining modes of transport,
such
as cycling, walking and
bus
, and just
bus
, each showed a similar figure of about 6
million
trips
per
year
.
However
, 2010 presented a significant shift. The
number
of
students
commuting to
school
by car rose to the highest, at 11
million
per
year
.
Conversely
, the
number
of
students
walking to
school
decreased to 6
million
per
year
.
Additionally
, the
number
of
students
cycling to
school
recorded the lowest figure, at 2
million
. Meanwhile, the
number
of
students
using walking and
bus
and just
bus
decreased to 3
million
and 5
million
respectively, compared to 1990. Over time, with the development of transportation, it seems more common for children to travel by car rather than walking
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