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Band 3.5

Space exploration is too expensive and money should be spent on more important things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some believe that
discoverring
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discovering
 the mysteries of
universe
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 should be invested.
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, many people
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 that there are more important purposes which require the value of
money
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. From my point of view,
athough
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although
though
space
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exploration
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 is a vital issue, there are many problems which are more important in the present time. It is obvious that there are several advantages
of
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 investing in
space
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 technology.
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, humans
are
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usually a sense of curiosity;
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, adventure and
exploration
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 would be an interesting way in order to satisfy their desire.
As a result
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, it helps people answer
variously
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 fundamental questions.
Secondly
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, new technologies and
researches
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 can be developed and the energy exhaustion may be solved by
space
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exploration
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simutaneously
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simultaneously
.
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, many disadvantages of
this
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 matter outweigh.
While
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 meeting the demand of
astronaunts'
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astronauts'
 lives is very expensive,
money
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 should be invested in more pressing problems
such
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 as climate change, famine or poverty.
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, it is a waste of
money
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 since it produces no instant benefits for humans. To cite an instance, whenever having an experiment
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they are not certain about any success.
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,
instead
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 of
space
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 investment,
money
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 should be spent on
others
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 essential purposes effectively. In conclusion,
inspite
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in spite
 of a lot of useful benefits from
space
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exploration
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such
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 as reducing
the
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energy exhaustion and satisfying the desire of humans, I strongly claim that having other vital purposes
which
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apply
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need
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needs
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 to be supported by
government
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the government
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 and communities.

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Grammar
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Examples
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Logic and Coherence
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Balanced View
Your essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of space exploration, which shows a balanced view.
Structure
The introduction and conclusion appropriately frame the essay, providing a clear start and end to your argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • myriad
  • pressing issues
  • allocated
  • advances
  • direct results
  • pave the way
  • uninhabitable
  • inspirational aspects
  • fuels innovation
  • shared goal
  • intellectual capital
  • budget overruns
  • tangible benefits
  • rationale
  • dedicating
  • returns on investment
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