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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Job is an integral part of our life. It's the way
people
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 earn money and realize themselves. So, some
people
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 claim that professionals must
work
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 in the
country
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 where they receive their skills
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 others believe that they should be free to choose a place to
work
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion
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.
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 with, to become a professional
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 as doctor or engineer you need to enter the University and really
work
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 hard. In some countries, you are able to receive
education
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 for free. The local governments would pay all the bills connected with
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 process. So, in
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 case, it's quite logical the demand to
work
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 in some countries for some years. But there is some problem with the human choice. If a person doesn't really like
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country
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 or receive
work
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 it might cause problems related to a lack of motivation.
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, you are studying at university to become an engineer but
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 of your
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, you feel alone and want to return to your homeland. After all, you won't be really a good professional. On the other side, many countries
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 as the USA don't provide an opportunity to have a free
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. Of course, foreign students
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 there take
place
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the place
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 of local
people
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. It's not so good if they just leave
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country
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the country
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 after
education
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. But
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 enables international knowledge exchange.
Therefore
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, freedom in choosing a
country
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 for a job is beneficial for everyone in the end.
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,
people
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 would be happier as they could live and
work
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 in a
country
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 with the lifestyle they like. In conclusion,
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 want to say that
people
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 should have the opportunity to study and
work
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 in a place where they feel comfortable. If a person wants to change the
country
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 in which he wants to
work
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 and already has received a free
education
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,
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 he must reimburse the money spent on it and leave freely. I think
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 is the best way.

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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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overall
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task achievement
The essay effectively addresses both views of the prompt and provides a clear opinion in the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-defined, providing a good structure to the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a logical progression of ideas and covers relevant points on the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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