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The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.

The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.
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The chart delineates the period of
time
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 to manufacture vehicles by four car brands- General Motors,
Ford
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, Toyota and
Honda
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 at their US factories over the span of 8 years, starting in 1998. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
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 these 4 companies experienced a downward trend.
Whereas
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 the number of General Motors was highest, the figure for
Honda
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 was lowest. As observed,
Honda
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 and Toyota consistently dominated the fast production times. In the first year, both brands spent an average
time
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 of approximately 22
hours
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 per vehicle.
While
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 Toyota’s
time
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 kept increasing gradually to nearly 24
hours
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, the figure for
Honda
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 declined sharply to around 20
hours
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 in the next year. In 2001, these two companies rebounded to their previous number in 1998 at nearly 22
hours
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.
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, the specific period to produce cars of Toyota reached a peak after undergoing a significant decrease to 20
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.
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, the number of
Honda
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 witnessed a similar decline to around 20
hours
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. General Motors and
Ford
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initially
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 had substantially longer production times in 1998, with GM taking nearly a day and a half to finish one product. In comparison with the average
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 spent by
Ford
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, which witnessed a dramatic increase from 28
hours
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 to 31
hours
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 in 2001,
the
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GM’s
time
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 plummeted to 27
hours
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 at
this
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time
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. Both manufacturers GM and
Ford
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 decreased respectively to 22
hours
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 and 21
hours
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due to
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 the improvement of the car industry in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, ford, honda, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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