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The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.
The two maps below illustrate the changes
of
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 coastline area in Australia from 1950 to today.
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, the waterfront area has significant development including access roads and some new facilities. In 1950, the access road only went to
a
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parking located next to the pavilion. the pavilion, dining tables and a playground lined along the road in the south. A
light house
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lighthouse
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 was located near the 25m
pool
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 on the eastern side of the beach. On the western side of the beach, there was only a small
pool
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 to be positioned. At present, It is around a lighthouse that the access roads are extended. The pavilion is situated between two car parks and two swimming pools are remained.
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However
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 a 25m
pool
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 located on the western side is converted into a 50m
pool
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 with a new restaurant and surf club. a 25m
pool
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 in the east is unchanged,
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 it is
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 accompanied by a new
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surf club.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words m, pool with synonyms.
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