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The given table illustrates the proportions of attendance in secondary schools in India. These values are given from 2000 to 2015 with a gap of 5 years.

The given table illustrates the proportions of attendance in secondary schools in India. These values are given from 2000 to 2015 with a gap of 5 years.
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The given table illustrates the proportion of attendance in secondary
schools
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 in India, values are given from 2000 to 2015 with a gap of five years,
it is clear that
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the
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apply
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attedance
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attendance
 in Convent-Run
Schools
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 is higher than
all
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in all
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 other types of educational centres.
According to
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 the graph, the Government
Schools
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 in Villages
has
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have
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 the lowest percentage of discipline of all
Schools
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 in all
the
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four periods,
However
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, all educational
centres
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centres'
centre's
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 attendance
is improving in
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improved
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 every five years except General English medium
schools
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 which dropped at a rate of 3% in 2005, despite that
schools
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 in villages have low attending awareness, it is getting better.
Secondly
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, my advice for the
ministry
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Ministry
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 of
education
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Education
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 is to punish or
make
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take
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 a legal
offense
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offence
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 on parents if participated percentage of students is lower
that
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than
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 75% in order to improve the
the
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apply
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students's knowledge. In
conclude
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conclusion
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, the rate of school participation in Convent-Run
Schools
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 is significantly higher than
all
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in all
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 the others.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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