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The chart below shows the number of houshold in USA by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015

The chart below shows the number of houshold in USA by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015
#houshold #usa #income
The precented bar chart gives information about
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in
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 the number of households by annual earnings in
term
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 of 5 categories
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 as less than 25 000$, 25000-49999$, 50000-74999$, 75000-99999$ and 100000$ and more in three different
years
.
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, as can be seen from the chart the people who
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the
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over 100 000$ income
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 the highest number of households in 2
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 period of 3 given. Families with 25000-49999$ and 50000-74999$ remained stable over the
years
. It is obvious that
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 over 100000$ income experienced the highest rate with almost 30
millions
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 in 2007, after
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decreasing
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at
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 27
millions
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 in 2011, the index had grown
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 38
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 by 2015. The figure for less than 25000 started at 25
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 in 2007, after
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increase
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at
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millions
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 remained stable in 2011 and 2015. The indexes for less
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than
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 250000$ and 250000-49999$ remained stable over the 3 given
years
 with just over 20
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 and nearly 15
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million
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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