The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates 3 prospective plots for a recreational complex.
Overall
, locations A and B are already developed and basic infrastructures are readily available. Whereas
plot
C is an undeveloped meadow with natural beauty and a pleasant atmosphere.
Firstly
, the area
A is in the vicinity of a factory. Roads and basic infrastructures are present in the location
, but, this
location
is not ideal for a leisure centre. Since people want to relax and enjoy themselves in the park, this
will not be possible near that neighbourhood. Also
, pollution is a factor too. Furthermore
, the second plot
B is in a housing area
. Like plot
A this
area
is also
developed. But a lot of crowd and traffic will be generated in this
location
. Therefore
, this
is also
not a good option for a park.
Lastly
, the third plot
C is the ideal location
for a leisure complex. As it has a vast area
, it is possible for an expansion. And the
natural beauty and clean atmosphere will attract tourists to Correct word choice
The
this
spot. Therefore
, location
C can be selected for the new recreational park.Submitted by augustinjose99 on
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