Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Some people argue that the media should not expose superstars' personal
lives
. This
essay agrees that the private lives
of celebrities should not be openly shared by the press, because of their rights to privacy and to have their personal lives
separated from work.
Public figures are also
human and thus
have the right
to privacy. However
, the media constantly violated this
right
by putting celebrities' personal lives
in the limelight for the consumption of the masses. The press likes to follow and capture celebrities in their daily life or important events and share them with the public. For instance
, singer Dua Lipa had her wedding day documented and exposed by the paparazzi despite having explicitly stated that the singer didn't want it to be shared with the public by the news.
In addition
to that, public figures have both professional lives
and personal lives
, and the latter should not be exposed freely by the news. That is
to say, famous people may not do the conventional 9 to 5 jobs, nevertheless
, what they do is still in their professional capacity. Public figures' working lives
are different to their personal ones, and yet the press can't distinguish them. For example
, female actresses, like Anne Hathaway and Margot Robbie have complained that in movie interviews, they are likely to be asked about their dating history, which is not at all related to the movie they are promoting.
In conclusion, in regard to the human right
to privacy and the right
to work-life balance, famous people deserve not to have their personal lives
made for public consumption by the media.Submitted by annzhr on
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task achievement
The essay provides a clear position on the topic, which is well-maintained throughout the essay. However, you can strengthen your arguments by providing more diverse examples and expanding on how the invasion of privacy affects celebrities personally and professionally.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
You provided a clear thesis statement in the introduction, outlining your stance effectively.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion is concise and reinforces your position well.
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