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The graph below shows the numberof enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011

The graph below shows the numberof enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011
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The line graph illustrates how many
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 the Tourist Information Office of a city attained throughout half a year in 2011.
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, the total number of
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 received rose quite notably during the recorded period.
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,
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 more and more questions were obtained directly and on call, it was the opposite for
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 received through written communication methods. The most noticeable feature is how significantly the figure for direct
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 increased during six months. Started at approximately 400 in January, it gradually climbed to nearly five times the amount just after two quarters.
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 outstanding rise had turned the approach from being
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 used to the
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 utilised method. Despite the lack of
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 a remarkable increase, the number of questions obtained by telephone still experienced quite a steep inclination, especially in May and June. 1600
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 received on call, which is twice as much as the figure at the beginning of the period. Written
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 figure was the only thing that experienced a downward trend. It started at around 750 in January and dropped to only 400 in June.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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