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You have recently taken a two day course .write to give your feedback to the course organiser and say Guve details of the course What did like or dislike about it Suggest more improvement to the course

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Adrian, and I am writing
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 letter to provide feedback on the two-day help desk support workshop held at ABC University on March 19. On one hand, the instructors were well-versed and instructive people. They were able to answer all the queries of the
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, they provide detailed explanations and suitable examples to the
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 so that they can understand what a real scenario would be.
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, I felt
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disappointed
 with the modules of the workshop because there was not much exercise to work with.
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, the lunch period was only 15 minutes
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 most of the
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have
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 to eat their
meal
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 hastily. In any case, I suggest that increasing the lunch break duration would be helpful, as it would allow
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 to enjoy their lunch and get to know one another better.
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 would enhance
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' social skills and help them gain more knowledge from one another. I hope you will accept my feedback and make the necessary amendments. Sincerely, Adrian
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organization
Consider spending a bit more time on structuring your feedback about what you liked and disliked in separate paragraphs to improve clarity.
development tap
Try to elaborate a bit more on how exactly the increase in the lunch break would benefit the participants or suggest specific topics you would like more exercises in.
greeting and closing
The letter opens and closes with an appropriate greeting and sign-off.
positive content
Feedback on the course instructors is clear and positive.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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