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The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.

The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
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The map describes the changes that
accured
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occurred
 at a
museum
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 from the year 1957 compared to
year
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the year
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 2007 . The
museum
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 contains several
divistions
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divisions
such
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 as the local history room ,
museum
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 store , and other rooms . In the following
paragraph
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paragraph,
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i
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I
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 will
further
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 elaborate
the
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on the
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 specific changes that
happend
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happened
happen
.
Overall
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 , the
museum
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 had expanded by replacing the wide area of the garden , the
museum
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 had expanded , adding some
amenties
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amenities
such
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 as car parking ,
cafe
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a cafe
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, and
education
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an education
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 centre .
Firstly
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 , when entering the
museum
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 it will get you to the shop , compared to the year 1957 that directly
guide
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guides
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 you to the national history exhibition .
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Also
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 a cafe
had
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has
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 been added in the
south east
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southeast
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 of the
museum
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 .
Secondly
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 , the local history Room was expanded and had been placed at the centre of the
museum
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 .
In
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addition
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 a reception has been built just by the right side of the
museum
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 shop.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attract a broader audience
  • infrastructure
  • interactive displays
  • virtual tours
  • environmental sustainability
  • community engagement
  • strategic partnerships
  • inclusive exhibitions
  • accessibility
  • branding and marketing strategies
  • evolution
  • maintain relevance
  • appeal
  • differently-abled visitors
  • cultural institutions
  • educational organizations
  • joint exhibits
  • exchange programs
  • green spaces
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