The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
The map describes the changes that
accured
at a Correct your spelling
occurred
museum
from the year 1957 compared to year
2007 . The Change the article
the year
museum
contains several divistions
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divisions
such
as the local history room , museum
store , and other rooms . In the following paragraph
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paragraph,
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will Change the capitalization
I
further
elaborate the
specific changes that Change preposition
on the
happend
.
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happened
happen
Overall
, the museum
had expanded by replacing the wide area of the garden , the museum
had expanded , adding some amenties
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amenities
such
as car parking , cafe
, and Correct article usage
a cafe
education
centre .
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an education
Firstly
, when entering the museum
it will get you to the shop , compared to the year 1957 that directly guide
you to the national history exhibition . Correct subject-verb agreement
guides
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had
been added in the Wrong verb form
has
south east
of the Correct your spelling
southeast
museum
.
Secondly
, the local history Room was expanded and had been placed at the centre of the museum
. In
addition
a reception has been built just by the right side of the Add a comma
addition,
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