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The chart below show changes in number of international students in Australia in 2019 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comprarisons where relevant.

The chart below show changes in number of international students in Australia in 2019 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comprarisons where relevant.
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The chart shows the
number
 of international
students
 in Australia from six countries in 2019 and 2020.
Overall
 in both years, China had the most
students
. Malaysia had the lowest
students
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number of students
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 in 2019. There were 182,325 Chinese
students
, but
this
number
 dropped to 167,458 in 2020.
In
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Malaysia had the biggest drop, from 27,271
students
 in 2019 to 15,354 in 2020. India had the
second highest
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number
 of
students
. The
number
 of Indian
students
 increased from 92,022 in 2019 to 108,049 in 2020. Nepal
also
 saw a rise in student numbers, going from 46,982 in 2019 to 50,202 in 2020. Vietnam had a small increase, from 22,204 in 2019 to 23,286 in 2020. Brazil's student numbers went down slightly, from 27,118 in 2019 to 25,959 in 2020. The chart shows that India and Nepal had more
students
 in 2020,
while
 China, Brazil, and Malaysia had fewer. Vietnam's numbers stayed mostly the same. These changes might be
due to
 travel restrictions or other factors. The chart helps us understand how the
number
 of international
students
 in Australia changed from 2019 to 2020.
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