Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features
The given pie charts
illustrates
the household expenditure of an average family in Change the verb form
illustrate
Japan
and Malaysia
, It is clear that
health care had the least
percentage of expenditure for Malaysian families.
First of all, there is a significant difference in housing prices in Correct word choice
lowest
Malaysia
and Japan
, housing is the highest spending for Malaysian households with approximately 34% of their income,Whereas
only 21% of Japanese's salary/wage is spended
on housing.
Correct your spelling
spent
Furthermore
, the rate of transportation costs in Japan
is approximately 20%, on the other hand
, Malaysia
only spend 10% of their income on transport, this
means Correct pronoun usage
which
than
Correct word choice
that
an
average household in Correct article usage
the
Japan
spend
twice Change the verb form
spends
as
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct determiner usage
that
Malaysian
households,Change preposition
of Malaysian
Nonetheless
, the prices of food in Malaysia
are higher than the costs in Japan
.
In conclusion, cost
of living Correct article usage
the cost
is
Correct your spelling
in
Japan
is higher in three categories, which are transport, health care and other goods and services, However
, Malaysia
is more expensive in only two, these two are housing and food.Submitted by yazanalt523 on
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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