In recent years, advancements in technology have transformed various aspects of society. Discuss both the positive and negative impacts of technology on individuals and communities. Provide relevant examples and your own opinion.
In the present world, science and technology have created a gigantic change in
the
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society
as well as
human life. This
essay will delineate the merits and demerits of technological developments and how it
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acts
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people
and society
.
Firstly
, due to
the
technological growth, Correct article usage
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people
get easy access to communication and internet servers and signals are very fast. It has resulted in most of the people
using smartphones and laptops. Hence
, they can search for all the information whatever they want. Simultaneously, there are numerous social media and websites available in
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Thus
, all individuals can easily know about the foreign country’s culture and life styles
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lifestyles
Moreover
, society
has changed by
the improvement of science and technology. To illustrate, nowadays most Change preposition
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the
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people
are working at home also
pupils are attending classes through
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societies
atmosphere and Fix the agreement mistake
society
people
lifestyles have turned in Change noun form
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to
another direction.
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Furthermore
, it’s undeniable there are some drawbacks also
available by the science and technology development. In other words
, pupils and adults are consuming a lot of time in
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Hence
, their body and mind will possibly suffer. Additionally
, technological advancements make people
to be isolated from the society
. To illustrate, in my country most of the people
stay in their homes during their leisure time and they don’t have an interest in meeting others and also
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neighbors
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neighbours
To conclude
, technical development is one of the inevitable phenomenon
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phenomena
as well as
faded. Hence
, people
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, it will be beneficial to citizens as well as
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task achievement
While you have adequately addressed both the positive and negative impacts of technology, try to give more specific examples. This will make your essay more convincing and relatable.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences can be made clearer and more concise for better comprehension. For instance, 'development of communication and societies atmosphere and people lifestyles have turned in to another direction' can be simplified.
coherence cohesion
Ensure to keep a smooth flow between points and paragraphs. Some transitions are a bit abrupt. Use more linking words to enhance cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, making the structure evident.
task achievement
You provided relevant points about how technology impacts communication and lifestyle.
Your opinion
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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