The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff

members across the faculties of a major university in 2016.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main

features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates both male and female academic
staff
members in the year 2016 for different programs.
To begin
with, the major arts and education have more female
staff
compared to male
staff
. The percentage of females is 58% and 72% for art and education
while
male only has 42% and 25%.
Furthermore
, medicine
majors
have similar interest rates for males and females with a percentage of 49% and 50%.
However
, there are several
majors
such
as science, law, engineering, and business that include more male
staff
rather than female
staff
. The male percentages for these programs are 62%, 60%, 85%, and 62% respectively.
While
the female
staff
only have 38%, 40%, 18%, and 35%.
In addition
, the largest difference in percentages between male and female
staff
go to engineering
majors
with a difference of 67%.
To conclude
, there are several
majors
that are mostly dominated by males or females,
while
medicine
majors
are keen on a similar amount of gender.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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