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Online education is becoming more popular. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, some people prefer online
education
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 over conventional
education
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. Actually, there are huge benefits if we hold online
classes
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, even though there are drawbacks to
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 new method. One of the main reasons people choose online
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 is they can stay at home
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 studying, so they do not need to go outside.
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, it reduces transportation costs and time. If
students
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 used to go to school at least 30 minutes before the course started because their homes are far away from the school, they do not need to do
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 if they take the online course. They go to the class as simple as we turn on the laptop. Another reason is they can record the
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 and
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 replay them depending on their leisure time. It gives a huge benefit for
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 to understand the lessons fully. Sometimes,
students
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 miss class information because they need to go to the restroom or do other emergency business.
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, if they have an online class, they do not worry about missing the information because they can replay the course’s recording. Still, it is important to note that there are
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 disadvantages to online
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.
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, if
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 do not meet each other in real life, it can lead to less motivation to study.
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, if they face difficulties in the
courses
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. Not all
courses
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 can be delivered online,
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 as math, physics, and other
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 that need calculation and drawing. It is more effective if the teacher explains and writes it on the board. The conventional
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also
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 produce more eye contact and build better relationships between
students
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 and teachers. It can be a benefit for
students
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 to get a better understanding. In conclusion, online
education
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 will be a huge benefit for someone who lives far away from school by reducing transportation costs and time consumption. Yet, for a better understanding, conventional
education
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 will be a good option.
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, not all the subjects or
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 are suitable for online
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.

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task achievement
Try to develop the main points a bit more thoroughly. For instance, when discussing the benefits of online education, you could include more examples or statistics that highlight its growing popularity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that all points are equally balanced. The essay spends a bit more time elaborating on the benefits rather than the drawbacks. Balancing these parts out will improve the overall structure.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction is clear, sets the stage for the discussion, and presents a balanced view of the topic.
logical structure
You effectively use transitional phrases to maintain a logical flow. Words like 'another reason' and 'still' help guide the reader through your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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