The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2017.

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The column chart illustrates the weekly expenditures of households in a particular country in the years 1968 and 2017.

Overall

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, most of the weekly

income

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was spent on food and leisure in 1968 and 2017 respectively.

However

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, families spent the lowest amount of their

income

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on fuel and power in both years.

To begin

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with, the proportion of food was the highest at 35% in 1968,

whereas

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this

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figure was much lower in 2017 at 17%.

Moreover

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, 10% of families’ weekly

income

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was spent on housing in 1968,

however

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, it rose to nearly 19% in 2017.

Besides

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, fuel and power accounted for the lowest proportion in 1968 and 2017 with 6% and 4% respectively.

Furthermore

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, in 2017, families

used to spend

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spent

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twice as much money as families in 1968 on clothing

and

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apply

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footwear and personal goods.

In addition

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, the percentage of weekly

income

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on household goods was equal at 7% in both years.

Nonetheless

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, the percentage of weekly expenditure on transport and leisure was higher by 5% and 14% respectively in 2017 than in 1968.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

175 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Weekly income
Expenditure
Consumption patterns
Cost of living
Discretionary spending
Inflation
Economic indicators
Demographics
Socio-economic factors
Technology advancements
Government policies
Consumerism
Lifestyle changes
Fiscal habits
Budget allocation
Financial priorities
Societal trends
Purchasing power
Income distribution

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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2017.

Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

IELTS essay, topic: Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home, why and what are the advantages/disadvantages? Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a choice?

Some people think governments should spend as much money as possible exploring outer space. Others argue they should spend the money for poor people. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that it is effective for students to study in a group at school, while others think it is better to study alone. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some teachers say students should be organised into groups to study. Others argue students should be made to study alone. Discuss both views and give your opinion.