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The table and chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in 4 countries.

The table and chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in 4 countries.
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The table and bar chart provide information about students' expenditures in foreign
countries
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.
Therefore
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 spend money on living spaces, academies, and cost of living. The units are measured in dollars.
Overall
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, out of four
countries
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 namely A,
B
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, C, and D. The largest
amount
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 is spent on studies by country A
while
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 the Second highest, is
b
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whereas
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, the least is d.
However
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, in the case of other things like accommodation. Living cost the bar chart shows the increasing trend in all the
three
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countries
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 except for d as it shows slight variations.
Firstly
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, start with A the heavy
amount
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 of money is spent on studying about 875$ is greater as
compare
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compared
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 to all
three
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countries
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.
While
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 735$ is spent on
b
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 and the lowest
amount
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 is spent on D
THAT IS
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 ABOUT 435$. In the case of the bar chart, it shows an upward trend in all
three
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 nations except for d
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which
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it
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 shows a slight variation. Considering
countries
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 a,
b
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, and c show a rise in all
three
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 necessities and A spent a heavy
amount
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in contrast
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 to others
b
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 lies in second and c stands third
while
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 in d large people spent on studies and less on accommodation and slightly above in living cost.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, b, amount, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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