The table and chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in 4 countries.

The table and chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in 4 countries.
The table and bar chart provide information about students' expenditures in foreign
countries
.
Therefore
spend money on living spaces, academies, and cost of living. The units are measured in dollars.
Overall
, out of four
countries
namely A,
B
, C, and D. The largest
amount
is spent on studies by country A
while
the Second highest, is
b
whereas
, the least is d.
However
, in the case of other things like accommodation. Living cost the bar chart shows the increasing trend in all the
three
countries
except for d as it shows slight variations.
Firstly
, start with A the heavy
amount
of money is spent on studying about 875$ is greater as
compare
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compared
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to all
three
countries
.
While
735$ is spent on
b
and the lowest
amount
is spent on D
THAT IS
ABOUT 435$. In the case of the bar chart, it shows an upward trend in all
three
nations except for d
Correct pronoun usage
which
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it
Correct pronoun usage
which
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shows a slight variation. Considering
countries
a,
b
, and c show a rise in all
three
necessities and A spent a heavy
amount
in contrast
to others
b
lies in second and c stands third
while
in d large people spent on studies and less on accommodation and slightly above in living cost.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, b, amount, three with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.

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