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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centresSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centresSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.
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The given table compares the data on patients' evaluations in five categories of service at three health centres.
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, the
Preveril
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Prevail
Centre
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 has the greatest average rate of all centres,
while
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 every aspect of service at Longston
Centre
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 is the lowest.  Based on the given table, it is obvious that the
preveril
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prevail
centre
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constittuted
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constituted
8.3
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 average score of all, which was 2.5 points higher than that of
Longstan
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Centre
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. Next came the Marchbank
Centre
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, which was 7.2.  When it comes to different aspects, the response to concerns, the largest one of Preveril
Centre
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, made up 9.6, following booking appointments (9.1) and doctors' service (8.7), and they were all above the average.
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, surprisingly, the lowest rate of Longston
Centre
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 was
response
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 to concerns, with only 4.3.
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, booking appointments and pharmacy both were below
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average. Regarding Marchbank
Centre
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, there were only two aspects of services were lower than its average, which  were pharmacy and response to concerns (5.8 and 6.5, respectively)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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