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The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four countries received and the way the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four countries received and the way the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The
given
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chart and table
demonstrates
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 the quantity of financial allowance which
were
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was
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 taken and spent by four countries in 1974 and 30
years
 later.
Overall
, in 1974 the biggest amount of
money
 was spent
for
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on
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 finances and the lowest
for
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on
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 catering,
while
30
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in 30
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years
 both of them got equal monetary support and
biggest
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the biggest
a biggest
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 sum of
money
 was given to medicine.
Also
,
in
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apply
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this
 year
China
, Indonesia, Thailand and South Africa received different amounts of
money
 with
big
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a big
the big
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 spread in which
smallest
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the smallest
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 part took
China
 and
biggest
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the biggest
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 sum took South Africa, meanwhile
30years
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30 years
 earlier all for countries received
similar
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a similar
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 quantity of cash.
Firstly
,In 1974 for
“Catering”
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the “Catering”
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 and “Finance” aspects were allocated
equal
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an equal
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 amount of cash 70
millions
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million
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 and for
“Medicine”
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the “Medicine”
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 section
allotted
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was allotted
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 10
millions
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million
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 more,
Whereas
 30
years
 after that, for “
catering
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Catering
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” was allocated
15million
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15 million
, for “medicine” four times more and for “finance” aspect was given the most of sum 65millions.
Secondly
, In 1974 Indonesia received 55
millions
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million
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, which is 7
millions
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million
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 more than Thailand’s obtained cash. In
this
 year
China
 took 62
millions
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million
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 which is
3millions
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3 million
 less than South Africa’s gotten
money
. After 30
years
 the lowest amount of
money
 allotted
China
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to China
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 which is equal to 6000000. Thailand
gotten
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got
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 3 times more than
China
, Indonesia 5 times more and South Africa allocated 42000000.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, money, china, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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