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The chart below shows changes in the number of international students in Australia in 2019 and 2020.

The chart below shows changes in the number of international students in Australia in 2019 and 2020.
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The bar chart compares information about changes in the number of foreign
students
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 in
Australia
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 in 2019 and 2020.
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, the number of
students
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 who come from Malaysia is the
last
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 one in
this
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 chart. Most
students
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 from China visit to
Australia
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 study. In 2019,
people
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 who visited studied in
Australia
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 from other countries. Malaysians came to
Australia
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 , 19.564
people
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 and Brazilian
people
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 just over
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, 21.086 and in Vietnam
students
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 rate was , 23.268. Napal
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 rate was more relevant than other countries at, 50.252 and the second highest indicator was Indian
students
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 at, 108.049. One of the highest ones is Chinese
students
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 at, 167.568. In 2020, the student's rate of coming to
Australia
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 from China to study was higher than the previous year at, 182.325 but the Indian student's
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 was lower than the old year at, 93.024. Nepal
people
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 who come to
Australia
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 for university their a
count
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 of, 46.382 which is
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 lower than
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 years. Vietnam
students
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count
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 was at, 22.204 and the Brazilian
people
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count
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 , at 22.859 which is higher than the previous year. Malaysians
count
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 at, 21.736.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, australia, people, count with synonyms.
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