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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
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The given graph illustrates the
percentages
 of four recycling materials between 1982 and 2010 in a specific country. As is observed from the graph, all of the materials
percentages
 increased but
percentages
 of
alumininium
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aluminium
 cans saw a significant increase over the time
period
. The alumininium cans had no data in 1982 but it was approximately 3 % in 1986 and it increased dramatically which were almost 45 %
from
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between
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 1986 and 2010.
Percentages
 of paper and cardboard saw a slight increase over the time
period
.
Begining
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 of the
period
 and in 1990, it had
same
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the same
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percentages
 that was almost 65 %.
In addition
, it rose in 1986 and 1994 and the
percentages
 were 70% and 80%, respectively.
Also
, the
percentages
 decreased between 1994 and 2010. The
percentages
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percentage
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 of glass containers decreased between 1982 and 1990 and it reached the lowest rate
that
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which
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 was 40%.
However
, it had a sharp rise
from
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between
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 1990 and 2010 and it peaked in 2010. The
percentages
 of plastics saw a slight increase over the time
period
. It reached
the
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its
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 highest
lovel
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level
 in 2010 and it
waas
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was
 almost 10%.
Besides
, it had no data
both
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in both
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 1982 and 1986.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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