You are going to arrange a special party at your home next week. You want to invite a local artist who is a playback singer. Write a letter to him.

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Dear Mario, My name is Nisa and I would like to hire you and your team to sing in our Housewarming party next week. Our Housewarming party will take place

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14 Lavender Street, North California and we are planning to do it for 3 hours from 1 PM - 4 PM.

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party will be held in our backyard and it is going to be quite casual. Will I be able to get a song list from you so I can pick the most suitable song? Please let me know the cost and how can we accommodate you for

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event. If you are free, you are welcome to come and look at our place to see what we need to prepare.

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, kindly confirm the number of your team as I will be getting some uniforms for you all. Looking forward to hearing from you and I hope you have a great day. Kind regards, Nisa

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Make sure to include all relevant details, such as potential dates for when Mario can visit your place, to give more clarity.

coherence and cohesion

Try to present your ideas in a more structured manner by breaking down longer paragraphs into shorter ones.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is appropriate and polite, making the reader feel welcomed and respected.

complete response

The letter includes important details like the address, duration of the party, and requests for song lists and number of team members.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

158 words

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You are going to arrange a special party at your home next week. You want to invite a local artist who is a playback singer. Write a letter to him.

Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much. Do you agree or disagree? What other types of job should be highly paid?

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